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Post by Gooman on Oct 6, 2009 20:06:51 GMT -6
1 critism: You still sound like a guy. At least try to be a bit more feminine in your typeing when your playing as a girl.
Pidgey- Flying Rat Rattata- Normal Rat Caterpie- Forest Rat Metapod- ForestShell Weedle- Poison Rat Kakuna- PoisonShell
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Post by Rapter on Oct 6, 2009 22:12:26 GMT -6
Pidgey- Gustav is it's male Rattata- Whisk Metapod or Kakuna- MeatShield Pikachu- EvilMouse
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Post by SeriousJupiter on Oct 6, 2009 23:34:41 GMT -6
Nice chapters.
Praise:
- Good jokes - A female character
Criticism:
- You sound too much like a guy - You misspelled Haley - You didn't pick Squirtle
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Post by swimming95 on Oct 7, 2009 4:13:55 GMT -6
XD, I agree with SJ on the last con
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Post by Cabi.net on Oct 7, 2009 12:10:34 GMT -6
Ok lets tackle these problems one by one,
1: You sound too much like a guy.
Stop reading it in a deep voice then! Ive got nothing. Any tips to hekp me sound more girly? (Never thought I would be asking that question)
2: You misspelled Rival/Main characters name! Since its so early in the game I will just restart it and fix the names.
3.Why didnt you pick Bulbasaur/Squirtle? I just went with the one with the most votes.
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Post by Cogsworth on Oct 7, 2009 12:45:35 GMT -6
I just think of it as being you're playing it as you. even though you picked a girl as your character
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Post by Cabi.net on Oct 7, 2009 15:54:35 GMT -6
Thanks for the tip.
I am having trouble adjusting to the switch. Give me an update or two and I should get into the swing of things.
Oh and I will update tomorrow
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Post by missingno. on Oct 7, 2009 16:28:21 GMT -6
Okedy doekedy.
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Post by saberoflink on Oct 7, 2009 17:21:56 GMT -6
hmmm, depends on if you want to be shallow or not. If yes to that, then u make her comment on how ugly/tacky things are. ummm how pretty/ugly a pokemon is. Umm if someones hot or not? She has to be a very sour person. She also hasta have a very short temper. They get fed up really easily =/
Umm, if not. Girls are usually more refined than guys. They use better grammar and bigger words. Ummm, girls appreciate things a guy wud never notice. Girls get more excited than most guys when they are excited. Aaand, girls usually attempt to be nicer.
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Post by The Dark Fiddler on Oct 7, 2009 17:25:41 GMT -6
1: You sound too much like a guy. Stop reading it in a deep voice then!Ive got nothing. Any tips to hekp me sound more girly? (Never thought I would be asking that question) Don't change anything, they're just being sexist.
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Post by Gooman on Oct 7, 2009 18:15:08 GMT -6
Dark Fiddler, all I have to say to you is...
Meh.
I might try to make a sig thingy for this thread... do you want anything specificly?
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Post by PacoTheTaco on Oct 7, 2009 21:09:34 GMT -6
Done didn't take very long either.
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Post by SeriousJupiter on Oct 8, 2009 1:11:06 GMT -6
hmmm, depends on if you want to be shallow or not. If yes to that, then u make her comment on how ugly/tacky things are. ummm how pretty/ugly a pokemon is. Umm if someones hot or not? She has to be a very sour person. She also hasta have a very short temper. They get fed up really easily =/ Umm, if not. Girls are usually more refined than guys. They use better grammar and bigger words. Ummm, girls appreciate things a guy wud never notice. Girls get more excited than most guys when they are excited. Aaand, girls usually attempt to be nicer. Those are some very good tips. Also, an occasional squeal of delight would be fine, and screaming is OK too.
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Post by missingno. on Oct 8, 2009 4:41:21 GMT -6
Tell that to my sister she's 20 and yells A LOT. o.O
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Post by SeriousJupiter on Oct 8, 2009 6:40:33 GMT -6
Well, in that case I don't have to tell her that, do I?
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