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Post by DragonAndLance on Jul 30, 2006 22:27:59 GMT -6
pokemonblitz.smackjeeves.com/Looking for a Co-Author(s) to edit/add comics well im gone because i have lots to do Number of comics 3. 6 with filler/cover/credits
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Post by mjc0961 on Jul 31, 2006 0:52:09 GMT -6
Rule 1: Lose the ugly text box tails, and fast. They need to be more like the fourth panel of this one where it points directly at the character. Rule 2: What the hell was that random pikachu VS ghastly thing? Don't deviate from the plot for random crap like that. Rule 3: Text goes top to bottom and left to right in order of who is speaking. Sixth panel here is out of order.
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Post by DragonAndLance on Jul 31, 2006 3:42:28 GMT -6
1: i fixed the text box tails
2: that was FILLER its something to do when you dont feel like doing your comic or like a easter break
3: its not out of order i can see it
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Post by mjc0961 on Jul 31, 2006 3:50:13 GMT -6
1. Okay then.
2. Keep filler out of the archive. It doesn't belong there when other people are trying to read the plot.
3. No, it IS out of order. You have it like this: "A pokedex I ordered for you." "So what do I pick up?"
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Post by DragonAndLance on Jul 31, 2006 4:09:43 GMT -6
oh you mean that i fixed that in my new comic and from now on
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Post by mjc0961 on Jul 31, 2006 4:22:41 GMT -6
That battle was confusing. Try and limit the ammount of sprites on there.
At least it's a nice twist not using the original starters, though.
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Post by Joey Wheeler on Jul 31, 2006 7:44:54 GMT -6
Good comic, but, there are no periods or quotations, when do the sentences end?!
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Post by DragonAndLance on Jul 31, 2006 15:09:55 GMT -6
heh i know i forget those im gonna try to fix all of the problems in my next comic
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Post by Joey Wheeler on Jul 31, 2006 16:01:41 GMT -6
So, when is the next comic, do you know?
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Post by DragonAndLance on Aug 1, 2006 8:48:34 GMT -6
Today.. Hopefully its hard with swimming and stuff but i'll try my best!
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Post by Joey Wheeler on Aug 1, 2006 13:24:35 GMT -6
*Anime thumbs up smile thingy.*
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Post by DragonAndLance on Aug 2, 2006 4:32:59 GMT -6
Updated sorry its just part of it and its late >_>
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Post by mjc0961 on Aug 2, 2006 6:29:49 GMT -6
No making up moves! Your battle scenes are hard enough to understand without you throwing in made up moves too.
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Post by Joey Wheeler on Aug 2, 2006 9:13:28 GMT -6
Yeah, and no offense, Blue and Grim? Where the hell did you get that?
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Post by mjc0961 on Aug 2, 2006 9:40:32 GMT -6
Oh, Grim is Scyther's nickname? I thought you made up a move called "Grim Tackle."
Oh, but look at your first panel? The text is out of order again! The panel reads "Tail Whip?" "Poliwag Tail Whip!" You need to pay attention to your text order! I already told you this and you said you'd work on it. Don't be lying to us!
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