Rapter
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Post by Rapter on Sept 24, 2009 23:30:10 GMT -6
I've decided to try my luck at creating a sprite comic. So far I only have one page. But I'll try to update it within the next two days. The comic starts out in Kanto, and shows the heroic adventures of Crimson and the strange trainer Shades. This is basically how the comic will look and the size it will be. So if there's any problem with the font size/style, or if the characters are too small. please tell me. P.S. to those who want to know. Shades is this guy.
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Post by chaoman45 on Sept 25, 2009 12:57:07 GMT -6
The biggest thing I would watch for is the custom sprite you make. For example, the last panel - the character's eyeborw is small to sprite standards, as it should be the same size as the enlarged pixels. Also, the right arm isn't outlined when it really should be to improve the spite-comic-feel.
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Post by Rapter on Sept 25, 2009 13:26:56 GMT -6
Ok, I'll work on that.
Done, I re-edited the first page using your chaomon and I added some sound text.
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Post by Emily Pink on Sept 25, 2009 22:16:43 GMT -6
Well when you get enough pages done I recommend hosting them on Drunk Duck and then posting the link here... I say host em on drunk duck because Comic Genesis doesn't accept sprite comic submissions anymore and of the ones that do DD is the best~ Good luck in your endevor... and I hope your comic turns out great!
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Post by Rapter on Sept 26, 2009 21:25:38 GMT -6
Thanks Rick. Once I figure out how to use Drunk Duck, that's what I'll do. Until than here's page 2.
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Post by PacoTheTaco on Sept 26, 2009 21:47:39 GMT -6
Why dosen't he have eyes in the fourth panel also I can bearly read the text try making the text bubles lighter and the text darker
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Post by chaoman45 on Sept 26, 2009 22:48:27 GMT -6
Panel 13 and 14 I see an issue. There are multiple word bubbles that could easily be merged into a single bubble, rather than numerous ones. I get the impression there is more than two people.
Also, be sure that the text never touches the word bubble outlines because it makes it look sloppy.
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Post by Rapter on Sept 26, 2009 23:10:44 GMT -6
Ok, I managed to make the bubbles whiter and give him the missing eyes. And I'll work on making the text bigger and clearer tomorrow. Anyway thanks for the replies.
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Post by PacoTheTaco on Sept 26, 2009 23:14:41 GMT -6
Thanks thats much better now.
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Post by Rapter on Sept 27, 2009 17:07:17 GMT -6
I went back and increased the font and bubbles size on page 2. Also here's page 3
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Post by PacoTheTaco on Sept 27, 2009 17:56:11 GMT -6
Clever HeartGold/SoulSilver reference.
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Post by chaoman45 on Sept 27, 2009 21:46:18 GMT -6
k, much better.
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Post by Rapter on Sept 27, 2009 22:07:07 GMT -6
Thanks for the tips to make it better. Also page 4 is up. It's a little wordy, but the next few pages will have more action hopefully.
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Post by PacoTheTaco on Sept 27, 2009 22:08:41 GMT -6
I noticed a continuaty error in the comic Befor he looks at the billboard he is riding on a skateboard but after he is done reading the billboard his skateboard seems to dissappear. You might want to fix that.
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Post by Rapter on Oct 1, 2009 19:59:44 GMT -6
About the skateboard Paco, it's magical and turned into the pidgey that was on the roof on page 1, panel 1. Not really, I just forgot about it, but it will return. Anyway, I just finished what Rick suggested and created a DrunkDuck account And here's a link to the comic. www.drunkduck.com/Pokemon_Wildfire/index.php?p=618847Anyway, from now on that's how I'm gonna update, by posting a link to the new page here. Also I'll post a new page in a day or two.
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