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Post by wonderful on Aug 17, 2011 10:43:37 GMT -6
after my rather obnoxious acting a few months ago, i am here to say sorry and to start up a new lp. an lp of my second favorite pokemon game, becuase lets plays of pokemon games are magnum opus, the kid A of the lets playing world [/sarcasm]. #0-what a CHOICE introduction you got there, pokemon platinum! the only problem i've ever had with gamefreak was that logo of theirs, just what the frick it that? woah, thats a nice updated thingie c: ' ok who came on the pokemon logo ok well forests arent going to make up for that. its times like this i wish these pokemon games had animation. this picture right here just looks ridiculous as frick. oh disregard that i suck cocks (they are moving in this photo!!!!) aww look at that cute little penguin c: what does he evolve into? HOLY JUNK COCKS THAT IS AWESOME. its like the king of soemthing or another. well this one is just sort of underwhelming :c well this one just sucks dicks o.o aww hes sorta cute in a weird way. thats not cute at all keep in mind this is also being hosted at another forum so thats why the decisions may seem a little honkey at times. so yeah, go ahead and choose my gender and name, along with rival naem and pokemon. i am a needy person.
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Post by SeriousJupiter on Aug 17, 2011 11:04:18 GMT -6
Why do I have a feeling that this LP is going to be just as short-lived as your first one...
I strongly advice you to watch your language (and grammar). Please keep in mind that constant use of swear words (censored or not) and cock-sucking is not something people want to read in a Pokémon LP.
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Post by daveshn on Aug 17, 2011 15:15:38 GMT -6
Only problem was that you talked about dicks and cocks too much. If you are gonna swear, mix it up a little.
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Post by Cabi.net on Aug 20, 2011 14:03:00 GMT -6
Allow me to add to the critique. The humor, to me anyway, is just dick jokes and nothing more. You have to mix it up. If you don't people will become disinterested in it and stop reading.
Like SJ, I'd also suggest to not swear as much. Not for the same reasons though. I think swearing, as a punchline just isn't very good or funny. Sure, some of my favourite comedic moments involve a comedian swearing. But that's because they set it up right or they use it infrequently so that it's funnier because the swear adds emphasis to the punchline. (E.G; Ed Byrne's line "Like my mother said, if you have to swear to get people laughing you're obviously a cunt.")
For some technical help: You're using NO$GBA, right? Go into options and enable "VGA (poppy bright)" under GBA mode in the options. This makes the game look much better and less like mold.
I also assume that you are going to crop out the bottom screen in future updates. Just making sure about this. It doesn't need to be there anyway. It's useless for 99% of the game. We don't need to see it.
If you can fix these things, by all means, keep going. I'll only shut down the thread if you really start making a fool of yourself (Like last time.) or if it just becomes offensively bad.
EDIT: I forgot to mention my thoughts on the cross posting. I'm not entirely happy about it. I will let it go on though. But if it gives me a reason to lock it, I will, without any hesitation.
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Post by wonderful on Aug 23, 2011 11:55:20 GMT -6
Allow me to add to the critique. The humor, to me anyway, is just dick jokes and nothing more. You have to mix it up. If you don't people will become disinterested in it and stop reading. Like SJ, I'd also suggest to not swear as much. Not for the same reasons though. I think swearing, as a punchline just isn't very good or funny. Sure, some of my favourite comedic moments involve a comedian swearing. But that's because they set it up right or they use it infrequently so that it's funnier because the swear adds emphasis to the punchline. (E.G; Ed Byrne's line "Like my mother said, if you have to swear to get people laughing you're obviously a cunt.") For some technical help: You're using NO$GBA, right? Go into options and enable "VGA (poppy bright)" under GBA mode in the options. This makes the game look much better and less like mold. I also assume that you are going to crop out the bottom screen in future updates. Just making sure about this. It doesn't need to be there anyway. It's useless for 99% of the game. We don't need to see it. If you can fix these things, by all means, keep going. I'll only shut down the thread if you really start making a fool of yourself (Like last time.) or if it just becomes offensively bad. EDIT: I forgot to mention my thoughts on the cross posting. I'm not entirely happy about it. I will let it go on though. But if it gives me a reason to lock it, I will, without any hesitation. thanks for the critique, and i promise, i wont be an idiot like last time. and the bottom screen will be out of it for the LP because not much goes on down there.
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Post by Cabi.net on Aug 23, 2011 12:00:25 GMT -6
Cool, now that that's out of the way, a question. Is it too late to suggest names or are you still taking?
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Post by wonderful on Aug 23, 2011 21:15:05 GMT -6
Cool, now that that's out of the way, a question. Is it too late to suggest names or are you still taking? of course!
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Post by SeriousJupiter on Aug 24, 2011 12:55:27 GMT -6
Of course it's too late or of course you're still taking?
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Post by wonderful on Aug 27, 2011 11:20:06 GMT -6
Of course it's too late or of course you're still taking? still taking names.
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Post by Antihero on Aug 28, 2011 5:37:57 GMT -6
Sorry but the commentary to that intro was terrible.
Don't swear as much and don't force yourself on the comedy.
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