micky
Novice Trainer
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Post by micky on Aug 13, 2007 17:49:47 GMT -6
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Post by DemonicChocobo on Aug 13, 2007 19:26:50 GMT -6
I'd advise against using the title "Dragonball Z" since that's already been used, and this clearly isn't a remake or reinterpretation of the series.
Also, it's not a very serious problem, but you've got a few spelling and grammar mistakes.
Lastly, you don't really portray the characters in a believable way...it seems a bit forced.
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Post by daveshn on Aug 14, 2007 5:16:50 GMT -6
I just don't see any jokes here. There are a few inside ones, but nothing else.
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Post by Xero Necross on Aug 22, 2007 8:45:45 GMT -6
i dont even see the comic... i think the link gone bad...
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Post by RAZEK on Aug 22, 2007 11:59:11 GMT -6
That or he just gave up on it
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Post by Xero Necross on Aug 23, 2007 8:57:06 GMT -6
eh owell... i was hoping to see it...
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