Post by lukaskirkby on Mar 26, 2007 0:26:18 GMT -6
Cover - A bit boring, but people will click on it to read more.
Pizza, Anyone - It's alright I suppose. Nothing major for a first episode, but I suppose it's only the intro.
Town, etc - Still the introduction. Still not very interesting. You could have joined this one with the previous episode to make an Introductory episode.
Chapter 1 Cover - Hopefully we will be able to see a storyline appearing in this chapter.
Paul v Jalen - The moves are a bit shoddy. I suggest using the real battle scenes. I can get you some if you want. And I don't see a storyline either.
Good old etc - I suppose theres a sorta storyline coming with this one, and a slight cliffhanger. It shows improvement.
She wants etc - Nothing really happens here, apart from a cliche joke.
I needed etc - meh, it's a storyline for the next episode, probably a battle.
Evee v Magikarp - The quick effects are good, but I still think you should use proper battle scenes for these type of things.
Tough Magikarp - You didn't have to do this episode to be honest, you just make work for yourself.
Lets try again - Yeah he caught it. Try to get a better word art though, or change the colour of the one your using.
Jalen Caught a Magikarp - This was an ok episode. Nothing wrong with it. The magikarps a bit cliche though.
Chapter 2 cover - It's a nice cover, but still room for something else.
Tammy, etc - A good episode, sets the scene nicely. Well done.
First Appeal - The effects on this were pretty good, well done, and the storyline is progressing.
Rainbow Diamonds - Good effects again, well done.
Well etc - Saves a load of episodes, and again good effects.
Jalens appeal - Great again, but you could of made this episode a cliffhanger. At least Jalen isn't a mary-sue.
Yeah, this comics got potential. Needs a lot of work on it, and I think you should use battle scenes, which as I said, I can get for you. Good luck with the rest of it, and I'll probably read more as it comes.
Pizza, Anyone - It's alright I suppose. Nothing major for a first episode, but I suppose it's only the intro.
Town, etc - Still the introduction. Still not very interesting. You could have joined this one with the previous episode to make an Introductory episode.
Chapter 1 Cover - Hopefully we will be able to see a storyline appearing in this chapter.
Paul v Jalen - The moves are a bit shoddy. I suggest using the real battle scenes. I can get you some if you want. And I don't see a storyline either.
Good old etc - I suppose theres a sorta storyline coming with this one, and a slight cliffhanger. It shows improvement.
She wants etc - Nothing really happens here, apart from a cliche joke.
I needed etc - meh, it's a storyline for the next episode, probably a battle.
Evee v Magikarp - The quick effects are good, but I still think you should use proper battle scenes for these type of things.
Tough Magikarp - You didn't have to do this episode to be honest, you just make work for yourself.
Lets try again - Yeah he caught it. Try to get a better word art though, or change the colour of the one your using.
Jalen Caught a Magikarp - This was an ok episode. Nothing wrong with it. The magikarps a bit cliche though.
Chapter 2 cover - It's a nice cover, but still room for something else.
Tammy, etc - A good episode, sets the scene nicely. Well done.
First Appeal - The effects on this were pretty good, well done, and the storyline is progressing.
Rainbow Diamonds - Good effects again, well done.
Well etc - Saves a load of episodes, and again good effects.
Jalens appeal - Great again, but you could of made this episode a cliffhanger. At least Jalen isn't a mary-sue.
Yeah, this comics got potential. Needs a lot of work on it, and I think you should use battle scenes, which as I said, I can get for you. Good luck with the rest of it, and I'll probably read more as it comes.